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2019年11月22日 03:01

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【介】【绍】【物】【品】【,】【大】【致】【可】【分】【两】【种】【情】【况】【:】【一】【是】【着】【重】【于】【应】【用】【;】【介】【绍】【时】【,】【文】【字】【要】【简】【明】【,】【如】【医】【药】【介】【绍】【、】【家】【电】【使】【用】【须】【知】【等】【。】【另】【一】【种】【则】【以】【介】【绍】【物】【品】【知】【识】【为】【主】【。】【为】【说】【明】【物】【品】【性】【质】【、】【功】【用】【和】【演】【变】【发】【展】【。】【吸】【引】【读】【者】【关】【注】【,】【则】【多】【用】【形】【象】【化】【的】【表】【现】【方】【法】【。】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【即】【属】【于】【后】【者】【。】【“】【牙】【刷】【”】【本】【为】【普】【通】【生】【活】【用】【品】【,】【如】【果】【平】【直】【道】【来】【,】【纵】【然】【有】【新】【的】【知】【识】【内】【容】【,】【也】【容】【易】【被】【忽】【略】【,】【不】【能】【引】【起】【读】【者】【的】【阅】【读】【兴】【趣】【。】【所】【以】【,】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【一】【改】【程】【式】【化】【的】【说】【明】【方】【法】【,】【而】【是】【运】【用】【拟】【人】【修】【辞】【手】【段】【,】【设】【计】【由】【“】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【”】【,】【将】【需】【要】【说】【明】【的】【知】【识】【融】【汇】【在】【一】【篇】【娓】【娓】【动】【听】【的】【“】【演】【说】【辞】【”】【中】【,】【语】【言】【有】【声】【有】【色】【,】【感】【情】【有】【起】【有】【伏】【,】【“】【牙】【刷】【”】【的】【种】【类】【、】【功】【用】【、】【演】【变】【等】【知】【识】【就】【在】【读】【者】【的】【会】【心】【一】【笑】【中】【顺】【势】【托】【出】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【且】【读】【文】【章】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【●】【上】【海】【师】【大】【附】【中】【刘】【孚】【瑛】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【姓】【名】【:】【牙】【刷】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【年】【龄】【:】【两】【个】【月】【零】【七】【天】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【民】【族】【:】【方】【头】【直】【柄】【族】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【职】【业】【:】【牙】【齿】【美】【容】【师】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【失】【业】【原】【因】【:】【刷】【毛】【弯】【曲】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【联】【系】【地】【址】【:】【床】【下】【杂】【物】【箱】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【大】【家】【好】【!】【我】【是】【牙】【刷】【。】【以】【上】【是】【我】【的】【简】【历】【,】【拜】【托】【大】【家】【替】【我】【找】【一】【份】【工】【作】【。】【或】【许】【有】【人】【会】【问】【:】【牙】【刷】【这】【一】【行】【干】【得】【不】【是】【挺】【好】【的】【,】【怎】【么】【会】【下】【岗】【?】【唉】【,】【一】【言】【难】【尽】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【想】【当】【初】【,】【刚】【得】【到】【那】【份】【工】【作】【时】【,】【是】【何】【等】【风】【光】【:】【家】【住】【干】【净】【宽】【敞】【的】【漱】【口】【杯】【,】【每】【天】【只】【需】【工】【作】【二】【三】【次】【,】【空】【闲】【时】【便】【和】【牙】【膏】【侃】【大】【山】【;】【如】【遇】【主】【人】【出】【差】【,】【虽】【说】【宾】【馆】【里】【有】【洗】【漱】【用】【具】【,】【但】【主】【人】【每】【次】【还】【是】【带】【我】【去】【,】【把】【牙】【膏】【独】【自】【留】【在】【家】【里】【。】【每】【次】【回】【来】【我】【都】【自】【豪】【地】【向】【牙】【膏】【讲】【述】【着】【外】【面】【的】【世】【界】【。】【就】【这】【样】【过】【了】【两】【个】【月】【,】【不】【幸】【降】【临】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【那】【天】【,】【主】【人】【一】【到】【家】【就】【叫】【我】【出】【来】【,】【我】【以】【为】【要】【“】【加】【班】【”】【,】【于】【是】【我】【伸】【了】【个】【懒】【腰】【,】【无】【精】【打】【采】【地】【爬】【出】【了】【漱】【口】【杯】【。】【却】【不】【料】【主】【人】【从】【口】【袋】【里】【拿】【出】【了】【一】【把】【新】【的】【牙】【刷】【,】【说】【是】【让】【我】【跟】【他】【公】【平】【地】【竞】【争】【,】【由】【我】【先】【发】【言】【。】【当】【时】【,】【我】【吃】【惊】【得】【连】【弯】【曲】【的】【刷】【毛】【都】【一】【根】【根】【地】【竖】【了】【起】【来】【,】【偷】【偷】【地】【瞥】【了】【他】【一】【眼】【—】【—】【虽】【然】【花】【哨】【,】【但】【小】【小】【年】【纪】【就】【驼】【着】【背】【,】【小】【圆】【头】【上】【“】【头】【发】【”】【长】【得】【参】【差】【不】【齐】【,】【看】【上】【去】【就】【不】【正】【。】【于】【是】【我】【定】【了】【定】【神】【,】【挺】【直】【腰】【板】【,】【理】【直】【气】【壮】【地】【说】【:】【“】【干】【我】【们】【这】【一】【行】【有】【铁】【饭】【碗】【之】【称】【,】【每】【次】【接】【替】【工】【作】【总】【要】【等】【到】【前】【任】【寿】【终】【正】【寝】【—】【—】【刷】【毛】【脱】【落】【时】【才】【能】【接】【任】【,】【所】【以】【我】【认】【为】【他】【要】【接】【任】【还】【为】【时】【过】【早】【。】【”】【我】【信】【心】【十】【足】【地】【甩】【了】【甩】【头】【发】【,】【静】【等】【他】【的】【挑】【战】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【我】【可】【不】【是】【一】【般】【的】【牙】【刷】【:】【圆】【拱】【形】【刷】【头】【可】【探】【入】【难】【刷】【部】【位】【,】【刷】【毛】【呈】【波】【浪】【形】【,】【更】【紧】【贴】【牙】【齿】【,】【曲】【柄】【设】【计】【是】【根】【据】【…】【…】【”】【没】【想】【到】【他】【一】【开】【口】【就】【滔】【滔】【不】【绝】【,】【头】【头】【是】【道】【,】【别】【说】【是】【主】【人】【,】【就】【连】【我】【也】【被】【他】【的】【“】【广】【告】【词】【”】【所】【吸】【引】【。】【结】【果】【不】【言】【而】【喻】【—】【—】【我】【下】【岗】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【被】【迫】【迁】【入】【新】【居】【—】【—】【杂】【物】【箱】【。】【起】【先】【几】【天】【,】【不】【是】【睡】【觉】【,】【就】【是】【与】【老】【虎】【钳】【、】【螺】【丝】【帽】【闲】【聊】【,】【倒】【也】【悠】【闲】【自】【在】【。】【可】【这】【几】【天】【,】【整】【天】【坐】【立】【不】【安】【,】【总】【觉】【得】【缺】【些】【什】【么】【,】【浑】【身】【不】【自】【在】【。】【于】【是】【到】【处】【托】【朋】【友】【拉】【关】【系】【,】【试】【着】【找】【工】【作】【,】【争】【取】【有】【个】【好】【着】【落】【。】【这】【不】【,】【准】【备】【了】【一】【打】【简】【历】【,】【或】【许】【有】【用】【,】【但】【直】【到】【今】【天】【也】【没】【动】【静】【。】【嘘】【…】【…】【主】【人】【回】【来】【了】【,】【穿】【着】【一】【双】【沾】【满】【泥】【浆】【的】【鞋】【,】【好】【像】【冲】【不】【干】【净】【…】【…】【嘿】【!】【有】【了】【。】【大】【家】【稍】【等】【,】【或】【许】【我】【将】【有】【工】【作】【了】【,】【这】【次】【机】【会】【一】【定】【要】【抓】【住】【,】【我】【去】【去】【就】【来】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【使】【劲】【顶】【开】【箱】【盖】【,】【挤】【出】【箱】【子】【,】【看】【看】【主】【人】【似】【乎】【不】【耐】【烦】【了】【,】【便】【用】【尽】【全】【力】【地】【滚】【到】【主】【人】【脚】【边】【,】【晃】【晃】【摇】【摇】【地】【向】【主】【人】【示】【意】【。】【主】【人】【先】【还】【是】【摇】【了】【摇】【头】【,】【皱】【了】【皱】【眉】【。】【我】【不】【依】【不】【饶】【地】【挤】【蹭】【着】【主】【人】【的】【脚】【,】【主】【动】【地】【磕】【碰】【着】【他】【脚】【上】【的】【泥】【…】【…】【主】【人】【终】【于】【舒】【展】【了】【双】【眉】【,】【俯】【身】【拿】【起】【了】【我】【。】【我】【的】【身】【上】【重】【又】【感】【受】【到】【了】【熟】【悉】【的】【暖】【流】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【哎】【哟】【!】【终】【于】【刷】【完】【了】【,】【累】【得】【我】【好】【一】【阵】【腰】【酸】【背】【痛】【,】【还】【弄】【了】【一】【身】【的】【污】【泥】【。】【可】【话】【又】【说】【回】【来】【了】【,】【虽】【然】【累】【一】【些】【,】【脏】【一】【些】【,】【也】【总】【比】【下】【岗】【要】【好】【。】【我】【要】【为】【自】【己】【重】【新】【上】【岗】【好】【好】【庆】【祝】【一】【番】【。】【看】【来】【这】【些】【简】【历】【也】【可】【以】【扔】【了】【,】【“】【再】【就】【业】【工】【程】【”】【还】【得】【靠】【自】【己】【。】【大】【家】【说】【,】【对】【不】【对】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【本】【文】【以】【拟】【人】【手】【法】【写】【物】【。】【所】【谓】【拟】【人】【就】【是】【把】【物】【当】【做】【“】【人】【”】【来】【写】【,】【赋】【予】【物】【以】【“】【人】【”】【的】【思】【想】【感】【情】【和】【言】【行】【举】【止】【,】【目】【的】【是】【生】【动】【、】【形】【象】【地】【展】【现】【物】【的】【种】【种】【固】【有】【特】【征】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【既】【为】【拟】【人】【,】【那】【就】【得】【写】【物】【像】【“】【人】【”】【。】【所】【以】【,】【在】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【中】【,】【牙】【刷】【的】【名】【称】【就】【成】【为】【“】【姓】【名】【”】【,】【使】【用】【期】【就】【成】【为】【“】【年】【龄】【”】【,】【种】【类】【就】【成】【了】【“】【民】【族】【”】【,】【功】【用】【就】【成】【了】【“】【职】【业】【”】【。】【不】【仅】【如】【此】【,】【牙】【刷】【还】【如】【“】【人】【”】【一】【样】【,】【既】【能】【说】【会】【道】【,】【又】【有】【情】【感】【起】【伏】【。】【文】【章】【写】【牙】【刷】【为】【“】【下】【岗】【”】【而】【忧】【虑】【,】【为】【“】【出】【差】【”】【而】【“】【自】【豪】【”】【,】【为】【“】【迁】【居】【”】【而】【“】【不】【安】【”】【,】【为】【“】【再】【就】【业】【”】【而】【“】【庆】【祝】【”】【,】【真】【是】【一】【波】【三】【折】【,】【费】【尽】【心】【机】【,】【人】【情】【世】【态】【,】【跃】【然】【纸】【上】【。】【也】【就】【在】【牙】【刷】【这】【一】【颦】【一】【笑】【之】【中】【,】【有】【关】【牙】【刷】【的】【方】【方】【面】【面】【的】【知】【识】【深】【深】【印】【在】【读】【者】【心】【中】【。】【这】【就】【是】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【带】【来】【的】【风】【趣】【的】【表】【达】【效】【果】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【但】【是】【,】【拟】【人】【毕】【竟】【只】【是】【表】【现】【手】【段】【,】【而】【写】【物】【才】【是】【写】【作】【目】【的】【。】【所】【以】【,】【拟】【的】【是】【“】【人】【”】【,】【写】【的】【却】【是】【物】【,】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【,】【关】【键】【在】【于】【找】【准】【“】【人】【”】【和】【“】【物】【”】【的】【对】【应】【点】【。】【也】【就】【是】【说】【,】【拟】【人】【时】【要】【处】【处】【紧】【扣】【物】【的】【特】【点】【。】【比】【如】【,】【物】【是】【有】【使】【用】【期】【的】【,】【比】【之】【以】【人】【的】【“】【年】【龄】【”】【;】【使】【用】【期】【一】【过】【,】【比】【之】【以】【“】【下】【岗】【”】【。】【又】【如】【,】【物】【是】【有】【置】【放】【处】【的】【,】【比】【之】【以】【“】【家】【”】【;】【物】【与】【物】【有】【配】【合】【使】【用】【的】【,】【于】【是】【有】【牙】【刷】【和】【牙】【膏】【的】【“】【侃】【大】【山】【”】【;】【牙】【刷】【毛】【弯】【曲】【了】【可】【以】【“】【刷】【鞋】【”】【,】【这】【才】【有】【“】【再】【就】【业】【”】【之】【说】【。】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【,】【正】【是】【找】【准】【了】【这】【些】【对】【应】【点】【,】【读】【者】【才】【会】【看】【到】【“】【牙】【刷】【”】【的】【种】【种】【“】【人】【”】【的】【表】【现】【,】【原】【来】【都】【是】【物】【的】【特】【征】【的】【展】【示】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【对】【应】【点】【的】【照】【应】【下】【,】【作】【者】【尽】【可】【以】【发】【挥】【拟】【人】【化】【的】【表】【现】【功】【能】【。】【在】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【中】【,】【有】【两】【处】【描】【写】【夺】【人】【眼】【球】【。】【一】【处】【是】【牙】【刷】【“】【竞】【争】【”】【。】【旧】【牙】【刷】【面】【对】【新】【牙】【刷】【“】【吃】【惊】【得】【连】【弯】【曲】【的】【刷】【毛】【都】【一】【根】【根】【地】【竖】【了】【起】【来】【”】【,】【还】【“】【偷】【偷】【地】【瞥】【了】【他】【一】【眼】【”】【,】【同】【时】【“】【信】【心】【十】【足】【地】【甩】【了】【甩】【头】【发】【”】【,】【虚】【怯】【中】【而】【又】【不】【少】【自】【负】【的】【心】【态】【毕】【现】【,】【真】【是】【到】【了】【惟】【妙】【惟】【肖】【、】【纤】【细】【如】【发】【的】【地】【步】【。】【另】【一】【处】【是】【旧】【牙】【刷】【“】【再】【就】【业】【”】【。】【由】【“】【悠】【闲】【”】【而】【“】【不】【安】【”】【,】【再】【到】【“】【抓】【住】【机】【会】【”】【,】【“】【不】【依】【不】【饶】【地】【挤】【蹭】【着】【主】【人】【的】【脚】【,】【主】【动】【地】【磕】【碰】【着】【他】【脚】【上】【的】【泥】【…】【…】【”】【曲】【尽】【妙】【笔】【,】【声】【情】【并】【茂】【,】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【也】【算】【写】【到】【了】【极】【致】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【还】【有】【一】【点】【值】【得】【一】【说】【。】【说】【明】【文】【也】【有】【立】【意】【的】【要】【求】【。】【说】【明】【物】【品】【,】【自】【然】【要】【把】【物】【品】【说】【明】【清】【楚】【,】【但】【是】【,】【物】【品】【是】【为】【人】【所】【用】【的】【,】【写】【物】【就】【不】【能】【不】【融】【入】【人】【的】【思】【想】【感】【情】【和】【价】【值】【取】【向】【。】【比】【如】【,】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【在】【说】【明】【牙】【刷】【的】【相】【关】【内】【容】【中】【,】【就】【自】【然】【渗】【透】【作】【者】【的】【主】【观】【意】【识】【。】【在】【事】【物】【发】【展】【进】【程】【中】【,】【新】【陈】【代】【谢】【是】【必】【然】【的】【,】【变】【废】【为】【宝】【也】【是】【可】【能】【的】【,】【自】【强】【不】【息】【是】【永】【远】【需】【要】【的】【。】【《】【牙】【刷】【自】【述】【》】【通】【过】【现】【身】【说】【法】【,】【介】【绍】【了】【物】【品】【,】【也】【颂】【扬】【了】【精】【神】【,】【使】【读】【者】【既】【获】【得】【了】【美】【的】【感】【受】【,】【也】【获】【得】【了】【思】【想】【的】【启】【迪】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【是】【青】【少】【年】【喜】【闻】【乐】【见】【的】【表】【现】【方】【法】【。】【曾】【见】【有】【《】【书】【包】【里】【的】【争】【论】【》】【《】【苍】【蝇】【受】【审】【记】【》】【《】【从】【橡】【皮】【到】【修】【正】【液】【》】【等】【等】【,】【一】【篇】【篇】【生】【动】【活】【泼】【的】【作】【文】【,】【对】【于】【中】【学】【生】【准】【确】【地】【捕】【捉】【事】【物】【的】【特】【征】【、】【丰】【富】【想】【象】【力】【、】【增】【加】【写】【作】【兴】【趣】【都】【大】【有】【裨】【益】【。】【拟】【人】【写】【物】【,】【不】【妨】【一】【试】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【本】【文】【写】【一】【只】【毛】【色】【暗】【淡】【的】【小】【鸟】【面】【对】【自】【己】【赖】【以】【生】【存】【的】【自】【然】【环】【境】【的】【变】【化】【,】【所】【发】【出】【的】【各】【种】【不】【同】【的】【叫】【声】【,】【反】【映】【了】【环】【保】【这】【个】【大】【主】【题】【。】【这】【只】【小】【鸟】【先】【是】【在】【一】【片】【沉】【寂】【而】【荒】【瘠】【的】【山】【野】【凄】【婉】【地】【操】【练】【着】【一】【支】【并】【不】【悦】【耳】【的】【怨】【歌】【;】【接】【着】【是】【它】【对】【昔】【日】【山】【坡】【美】【丽】【容】【颜】【的】【回】【忆】【和】【梦】【想】【;】【继】【而】【是】【鸟】【儿】【们】【躲】【在】【暂】【时】【幸】【存】【的】【荆】【棘】【丛】【中】【发】【出】【的】【一】【阵】【阵】【哀】【鸣】【;】【最】【后】【是】【小】【鸟】【被】【一】【抹】【久】【违】【的】【绿】【色】【所】【吸】【引】【,】【发】【出】【了】【匿】【迹】【许】【久】【的】【清】【脆】【欢】【叫】【声】【,】【并】【感】【受】【到】【“】【鸟】【儿】【们】【的】【春】【天】【终】【于】【又】【回】【来】【了】【”】【。】【审】【题】【准】【确】【,】【主】【题】【鲜】【明】【,】【结】【构】【清】【晰】【,】【文】【章】【语】【言】【优】【美】【流】【畅】【。】【尤】【其】【是】【文】【中】【对】【于】【不】【同】【环】【境】【中】【小】【鸟】【叫】【声】【的】【描】【写】【细】【腻】【生】【动】【,】【很】【好】【地】【凸】【现】【了】【文】【章】【的】【主】【旨】【。】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【王】【代】【福】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【这】【儿】【有】【一】【只】【小】【鸟】【!】【”】【在】【草】【地】【上】【玩】【耍】【的】【女】【儿】【对】【母】【亲】【说】【道】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【噢】【,】【她】【还】【很】【小】【呢】【,】【连】【羽】【毛】【都】【没】【有】【长】【全】【呢】【!】【”】【妈】【妈】【爱】【怜】【地】【说】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【女】【孩】【托】【起】【了】【那】【只】【可】【怜】【的】【小】【鸟】【,】【望】【着】【它】【,】【眨】【巴】【眨】【巴】【眼】【睛】【问】【:】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【它】【为】【什】【么】【不】【回】【家】【呢】【?】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【母】【亲】【叹】【了】【口】【气】【,】【说】【:】【“】【你】【看】【那】【河】【边】【的】【树】【桩】【,】【昨】【天】【那】【儿】【还】【有】【一】【棵】【大】【树】【,】【小】【鸟】【的】【家】【就】【在】【那】【树】【上】【,】【可】【偷】【木】【者】【砍】【倒】【了】【树】【,】【它】【的】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【也】【死】【了】【…】【…】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【为】【什】【么】【它】【这】【么】【小】【不】【会】【死】【,】【它】【的】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【会】【飞】【,】【却】【死】【了】【呢】【?】【”】【还】【没】【等】【母】【亲】【说】【完】【,】【女】【儿】【就】【仰】【着】【头】【问】【了】【起】【来】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【都】【是】【爱】【自】【己】【孩】【子】【的】【啊】【,】【就】【像】【我】【爱】【你】【一】【样】【,】【危】【险】【时】【,】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【当】【然】【要】【拼】【命】【保】【护】【它】【们】【的】【孩】【子】【啊】【!】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【女】【孩】【似】【乎】【还】【想】【问】【什】【么】【,】【但】【是】【没】【有】【说】【出】【口】【,】【只】【是】【眼】【中】【含】【着】【泪】【花】【,】【喃】【喃】【地】【说】【:】【“】【小】【鸟】【真】【可】【怜】【,】【这】【么】【小】【就】【没】【有】【妈】【妈】【啦】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【哐】【”】【的】【一】【声】【还】【没】【等】【小】【女】【孩】【反】【应】【过】【来】【,】【一】【棵】【大】【树】【就】【倒】【下】【了】【,】【原】【来】【是】【偷】【木】【者】【又】【在】【砍】【树】【了】【。】【小】【女】【孩】【擦】【干】【泪】【水】【,】【捧】【着】【小】【鸟】【,】【跑】【过】【去】【送】【给】【偷】【木】【者】【看】【:】【“】【叔】【叔】【,】【你】【看】【这】【只】【小】【鸟】【多】【可】【怜】【啊】【!】【它】【的】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【都】【死】【了】【,】【你】【能】【为】【它】【留】【下】【几】【棵】【树】【吗】【?】【”】【偷】【木】【者】【有】【些】【不】【耐】【烦】【:】【“】【去】【!】【去】【!】【小】【孩】【子】【别】【捣】【乱】【,】【别】【妨】【碍】【大】【人】【干】【活】【!】【”】【说】【罢】【又】【抡】【起】【斧】【头】【,】【继】【续】【砍】【下】【去】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【女】【孩】【还】【想】【说】【什】【么】【,】【却】【被】【母】【亲】【抱】【走】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【回】【家】【后】【,】【小】【女】【孩】【当】【上】【了】【小】【鸟】【的】【妈】【妈】【。】【她】【到】【处】【寻】【找】【小】【虫】【子】【,】【但】【小】【鸟】【什】【么】【也】【不】【吃】【,】【只】【是】【凄】【厉】【地】【叫】【。】【那】【声】【音】【,】【声】【声】【扎】【在】【小】【女】【孩】【的】【心】【里】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【两】【天】【后】【,】【当】【太】【阳】【的】【第】【一】【缕】【光】【辉】【投】【进】【窗】【户】【时】【,】【小】【鸟】【死】【了】【,】【在】【它】【的】【眼】【角】【边】【挂】【着】【一】【滴】【泪】【。】【不】【知】【道】【为】【什】【么】【,】【小】【女】【孩】【没】【有】【哭】【,】【她】【从】【院】【子】【里】【捡】【回】【一】【片】【大】【大】【的】【红】【色】【枫】【叶】【,】【包】【裹】【着】【小】【鸟】【幼】【小】【的】【躯】【体】【,】【来】【到】【了】【院】【子】【里】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【唧】【唧】【唧】【…】【…】【”】【一】【群】【鸟】【儿】【飞】【来】【了】【,】【纷】【纷】【落】【在】【了】【院】【子】【的】【篱】【笆】【上】【,】【当】【小】【女】【孩】【望】【着】【它】【们】【时】【,】【一】【只】【小】【鸟】【飞】【到】【了】【小】【女】【孩】【的】【手】【上】【,】【然】【后】【斜】【着】【头】【,】【深】【情】【地】【望】【着】【死】【去】【的】【同】【类】【,】【然】【后】【用】【嘴】【轻】【轻】【啄】【着】【小】【女】【孩】【的】【手】【,】【就】【像】【孩】【子】【在】【对】【母】【亲】【倾】【诉】【一】【样】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【唧】【唧】【唧】【…】【…】【”】【落】【在】【院】【子】【篱】【笆】【上】【的】【那】【群】【鸟】【也】【“】【扑】【啦】【啦】【”】【地】【飞】【起】【来】【了】【,】【它】【们】【围】【着】【小】【女】【孩】【盘】【旋】【着】【,】【鸣】【叫】【着】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【哐】【”】【的】【一】【声】【又】【一】【棵】【大】【树】【倒】【了】【下】【去】【,】【瞬】【间】【,】【它】【湮】【没】【了】【那】【群】【小】【鸟】【的】【叫】【声】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【是】【一】【篇】【构】【思】【独】【特】【、】【意】【旨】【鲜】【明】【的】【优】【秀】【习】【作】【。】【文】【中】【写】【一】【只】【失】【去】【家】【园】【的】【小】【鸟】【被】【一】【位】【善】【良】【的】【小】【女】【孩】【收】【养】【,】【由】【于】【没】【有】【鸟】【爸】【爸】【和】【鸟】【妈】【妈】【的】【呵】【护】【,】【最】【终】【死】【去】【的】【故】【事】【,】【从】【而】【引】【发】【出】【诸】【多】【的】【主】【题】【。】【文】【章】【的】【亮】【点】【在】【于】【—】【—】【小】【作】【者】【独】【辟】【蹊】【径】【,】【突】【破】【了】【人】【们】【常】【规】【思】【维】【的】【藩】【篱】【:】【她】【不】【写】【小】【鸟】【被】【救】【,】【最】【终】【回】【归】【大】【自】【然】【,】【欢】【快】【地】【叫】【了】【;】【不】【写】【环】【境】【改】【变】【了】【,】【小】【鸟】【拥】【有】【了】【新】【的】【家】【园】【,】【高】【兴】【地】【叫】【了】【;】【而】【是】【写】【小】【鸟】【被】【救】【,】【最】【终】【死】【去】【,】【群】【鸟】【叫】【了】【。】【这】【里】【,】【作】【者】【给】【群】【鸟】【的】【“】【叫】【”】【赋】【予】【了】【多】【重】【含】【义】【:】【这】【叫】【声】【,】【是】【鸟】【儿】【对】【小】【孩】【子】【悉】【心】【关】【爱】【它】【们】【的】【感】【激】【与】【赞】【美】【;】【是】【鸟】【儿】【对】【偷】【木】【者】【破】【坏】【自】【然】【环】【境】【的】【谴】【责】【与】【鞭】【笞】【;】【是】【鸟】【儿】【对】【成】【年】【人】【漠】【视】【弱】【小】【生】【命】【的】【控】【诉】【与】【贬】【斥】【;】【是】【鸟】【儿】【对】【同】【类】【惨】【遭】【戕】【害】【的】【怜】【悯】【与】【祭】【奠】【;】【是】【鸟】【儿】【对】【美】【好】【自】【然】【环】【境】【回】【归】【的】【期】【盼】【与】【希】【冀】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【尤】【其】【是】【文】【章】【采】【用】【小】【说】【的】【笔】【法】【,】【运】【用】【诸】【多】【的】【描】【写】【,】【凸】【显】【出】【了】【一】【个】【纯】【真】【、】【善】【良】【、】【可】【爱】【的】【小】【女】【孩】【形】【象】【。】【文】【章】【在】【完】【整】【的】【故】【事】【情】【节】【中】【渲】【染】【小】【鸟】【的】【哀】【鸣】【及】【群】【鸟】【的】【叫】【声】【,】【意】【蕴】【深】【沉】【,】【耐】【人】【品】【味】【。】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【王】【代】【福】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】韩德君【<】【p】【>】【一】【朵】【小】【花】【,】【虽】【渺】【小】【,】【却】【也】【点】【缀】【世】【界】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

【<】【p】【>】【我】【是】【脆】【弱】【的】【嫩】【草】【,】【更】【是】【顽】【强】【的】【丝】【条】【;】【我】【是】【大】【自】【然】【的】【精】【灵】【,】【是】【坚】【强】【者】【的】【化】【身】【,】【但】【绝】【不】【是】【易】【燃】【的】【干】【草】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】韩德君【<】【p】【>】【一】【个】【人】【,】【再】【平】【凡】【,】【也】【可】【绽】【放】【耀】【眼】【光】【芒】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

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】【1】【1】【⑤】【秋】【天】【,】【是】【家】【乡】【最】【热】【闹】【的】【季】【节】【。】【欢】【乐】【的】【田】【野】【上】【到】【处】【是】【翠】【玉】【镶】【金】【。】【那】【洁】【白】【的】【棉】【絮】【会】【把】【你】【团】【团】【围】【住】【,】【让】【你】【置】【身】【于】【白】【云】【中】【,】【一】【时】【竟】【不】【知】【高】【低】【,】【不】【辨】【东】【西】【。】【远】【处】【,】【一】【望】【无】【际】【的】【金】【黄】【色】【的】【稻】【子】【在】【微】【风】【中】【向】【你】【频】【频】【招】【手】【,】【急】【不】【可】【耐】【地】【叫】【着】【:】【“】【熟】【了】【!】【熟】【了】【!】【”】【⑥】【月】【光】【下】【热】【情】【好】【客】【的】【家】【乡】【人】【会】【拉】【着】【你】【的】【手】【谈】【天】【说】【地】【。】【那】【时】【候】【,】【他】【们】【会】【忘】【记】【一】【天】【的】【疲】【劳】【掰】【着】【手】【指】【头】【告】【诉】【你】【,】【谁】【家】【的】【小】【伙】【子】【出】【门】【半】【年】【就】【成】【了】【小】【老】【板】【,】【谁】【家】【的】【姑】【娘】【足】【不】【出】【户】【却】【是】【名】【闻】【遐】【迩】【的】【养】【蚕】【好】【手】【。】【他】【们】【仿】【佛】【有】【说】【不】【尽】【的】【新】【鲜】【事】【,】【⑦】【道】【不】【完】【的】【幸】【福】【水】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【⑧】【伴】【随】【着】【春】【天】【的】【脚】【步】【,】【展】【现】【你】【眼】【前】【的】【又】【是】【另】【一】【番】【景】【象】【。】【⑨】【黑】【土】【地】【立】【刻】【换】【上】【了】【一】【身】【绿】【装】【。】【金】【灿】【灿】【的】【油】【菜】【花】【⑩】【装】【满】【了】【你】【的】【眼】【睛】【,】【惹】【来】【了】【一】【大】【群】【的】【蜜】【蜂】【、】【蝴】【蝶】【。】【绿】【油】【油】【的】【麦】【子】【也】【俯】【首】【微】【笑】【仿】【佛】【预】【示】【着】【又】【是】【一】【个】【丰】【收】【年】【。】【【】【1】【1】【】】【人】【们】【的】【欢】【歌】【笑】【语】【、】【机】【器】【的】【轰】【鸣】【声】【奏】【起】【了】【最】【动】【听】【的】【“】【闹】【三】【春】【”】【交】【响】【乐】【!】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【你】【知】【道】【吗】【,】【到】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【来】【一】【起】【捕】【鱼】【,】【这】【可】【是】【一】【件】【乐】【事】【。】【串】【场】【河】【以】【及】【大】【大】【小】【小】【的】【鱼】【塘】【是】【【】【1】【2】【】】【取】【之】【不】【尽】【的】【渔】【场】【。】【不】【必】【说】【柳】【下】【垂】【钓】【趣】【,】【烟】【雨】【透】【蓑】【衣】【,】【也】【不】【必】【说】【白】【帆】【映】【碧】【水】【,】【渔】【歌】【唱】【晚】【霞】【,】【单】【是】【冬】【季】【破】【冰】【捕】【鱼】【就】【可】【以】【让】【你】【乐】【而】【忘】【返】【了】【。】【请】【看】【吧】【,】【【】【1】【3】【】】【一】【网】【收】【到】【净】【是】【鱼】【,】【大】【的】【四】【五】【斤】【,】【小】【的】【也】【有】【二】【三】【斤】【,】【有】【时】【还】【能】【网】【到】【几】【只】【冬】【季】【罕】【见】【的】【大】【螃】【蟹】【。】【于】【是】【晚】【上】【便】【有】【鲜】【鱼】【肥】【蟹】【下】【饭】【了】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【【】【1】【4】【】】【朋】【友】【,】【如】【果】【说】【祖】【国】【是】【一】【座】【大】【花】【园】【,】【那】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【就】【是】【一】【朵】【带】【露】【的】【玫】【瑰】【沐】【浴】【着】【党】【的】【雨】【露】【阳】【光】【,】【开】【得】【更】【加】【绚】【丽】【多】【彩】【。】【2】【0】【年】【,】【我】【们】【镇】【纳】【税】【超】【亿】【元】【,】【跻】【身】【于】【苏】【北】【小】【康】【示】【范】【镇】【的】【行】【列】【。】【如】【今】【家】【乡】【人】【又】【在】【奏】【起】【时】【代】【的】【最】【强】【音】【加】【强】【精】【神】【文】【明】【建】【设】【,】【争】【取】【早】【日】【跨】【入】【省】【文】【明】【镇】【的】【先】【进】【行】【列】【。】【祝】【愿】【家】【乡】【骑】【上】【时】【代】【的】【骏】【马】【奔】【驰】【吧】【!】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【朋】【友】【,】【请】【到】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【来】【吧】【!】【这】【里】【物】【阜】【民】【丰】【,】【景】【美】【,】【人】【更】【美】【。】【你】【来】【了】【,】【保】【证】【你】【看】【不】【够】【,】【观】【不】【尽】【,】【梦】【里】【再】【重】【游】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【●】【点】【评】【:】【读】【罢】【这】【篇】【习】【作】【,】【感】【到】【有】【一】【种】【【】【1】【5】【】】【浓】【郁】【的】【乡】【土】【气】【息】【,】【清】【新】【而】【自】【然】【加】【之】【文】【题】【上】【一】【个】【“】【请】【”】【字】【,】【倍】【觉】【作】【者】【对】【家】【乡】【小】【镇】【的】【热】【爱】【之】【情】【。】【作】【者】【【】【1】【6】【】】【观】【察】【细】【致】【,】【反】【映】【家】【乡】【风】【貌】【,】【抓】【住】【了】【特】【色】【。】【既】【撷】【取】【了】【春】【、】【秋】【两】【季】【苏】【北】【水】【乡】【的】【不】【同】【的】【场】【景】【来】【写】【,】【又】【描】【写】【了】【冬】【季】【捕】【鱼】【这】【一】【令】【人】【乐】【而】【忘】【返】【的】【【】【1】【7】【】】【场】【面】【;】【既】【是】【一】【幅】【风】【景】【画】【、】【【】【1】【8】【】】【风】【俗】【画】【,】【又】【处】【处】【突】【出】【了】【家】【乡】【人】【的】【力】【量】【和】【精】【神】【,】【提】【升】【了】【文】【章】【的】【内】【涵】【▲】【另】【外】【,】【语】【言】【也】【形】【象】【生】【动】【,】【富】【有】【诗】【意】【一】【是】【综】【合】【运】【用】【了】【拟】【人】【、】【比】【喻】【等】【多】【种】【修】【辞】【手】【法】【,】【增】【添】【了】【文】【章】【的】【美】【感】【;】【二】【是】【善】【翻】【古】【人】【意】【,】【如】【“】【柳】【下】【垂】【钓】【趣】【,】【烟】【雨】【透】【蓑】【衣】【”】【“】【白】【帆】【映】【碧】【水】【,】【渔】【歌】【唱】【晚】【霞】【”】【读】【来】【更】【具】【【】【1】【9】【】】【艺】【术】【感】【染】【力】【;】【三】【是】【长】【句】【与】【短】【句】【、】【整】【句】【与】【散】【句】【的】【结】【合】【,】【使】【行】【文】【活】【泼】【、】【自】【由】【。】【这】【些】【都】【足】【见】【小】【作】【者】【【】【2】【0】【】】【在】【炼】【字】【炼】【句】【上】【下】【了】【工】【夫】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【①】【“】【坐】【落】【”】【一】【词】【是】【多】【余】【的】【。】【第】【一】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【苏】【北】【古】【镇】【梁】【垛】【是】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【“】【信】【息】【”】【用】【“】【众】【多】【”】【来】【形】【容】【欠】【妥】【。】【“】【商】【品】【”】【既】【有】【带】【来】【的】【,】【也】【有】【运】【出】【的】【。】【画】【线】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【便】【捷】【的】【交】【通】【促】【进】【了】【经】【济】【的】【繁】【荣】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【此】【处】【可】【改】【为】【:】【这】【里】【虽】【然】【没】【有】【名】【胜】【古】【迹】【、】【美】【丽】【传】【说】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【④】【“】【丰】【姿】【”】【改】【为】【“】【风】【姿】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑤】【画】【线】【句】【对】【全】【段】【有】【引】【领】【的】【作】【用】【,】【但】【“】【热】【闹】【”】【似】【不】【如】【“】【繁】【忙】【”】【来】【得】【贴】【切】【。】【“】【翠】【玉】【镶】【金】【”】【用】【得】【也】【欠】【妥】【,】【因】【为】【棉】【田】【和】【稻】【田】【之】【间】【不】【存】【在】【“】【镶】【”】【和】【被】【“】【镶】【”】【的】【问】【题】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑥】【为】【什】【么】【一】【定】【要】【在】【月】【光】【下】【呢】【?】【完】【全】【可】【以】【没】【有】【这】【个】【时】【间】【限】【制】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑦】【画】【线】【句】【不】【通】【,】【只】【要】【把】【“】【水】【”】【改】【成】【“】【感】【”】【即】【可】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑧】【此】【句】【最】【好】【改】【为】【:】【春】【天】【,】【是】【家】【乡】【最】【美】【丽】【的】【季】【节】【。】【这】【样】【就】【可】【与】【前】【一】【段】【相】【呼】【应】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑨】【苏】【北】【的】【土】【地】【并】【非】【是】【黑】【色】【的】【,】【不】【要】【硬】【搬】【现】【成】【的】【词】【语】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑩】【用】【词】【生】【硬】【,】【—】【—】【你】【的】【眼】【睛】【能】【“】【装】【”】【得】【下】【吗】【?】【画】【线】【句】【删】【去】【反】【而】【和】【下】【文】【接】【得】【更】【紧】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【1】【】】【画】【线】【句】【为】【套】【话】【。】【记】【住】【,】【这】【是】【广】【阔】【的】【田】【野】【,】【如】【果】【是】【在】【建】【筑】【工】【地】【或】【工】【厂】【的】【厂】【房】【里】【,】【则】【还】【有】【可】【能】【。】【删】【掉】【也】【不】【影】【响】【文】【中】【的】【表】【达】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【2】【】】【天】【下】【并】【没】【有】【“】【取】【之】【不】【尽】【的】【渔】【场】【”】【,】【赞】【美】【家】【乡】【,】【也】【不】【可】【有】【夸】【大】【之】【词】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【3】【】】【画】【线】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【网】【网】【打】【起】【的】【都】【是】【活】【蹦】【乱】【跳】【的】【肥】【鱼】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【4】【】】【这】【一】【段】【的】【首】【句】【是】【套】【话】【,】【改】【为】【:】【家】【乡】【的】【经】【济】【发】【展】【更】【是】【迅】【速】【。】【这】【样】【和】【下】【文】【联】【系】【就】【紧】【密】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【5】【】】【“】【点】【评】【”】【写】【得】【尚】【可】【,】【但】【仍】【有】【可】【商】【榷】【之】【处】【。】【“】【浓】【郁】【”】【二】【字】【还】【谈】【不】【上】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【6】【】】【从】【文】【中】【看】【不】【出】【作】【者】【有】【细】【致】【的】【观】【察】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【7】【】】【本】【文】【并】【无】【场】【面】【描】【写】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【8】【】】【“】【风】【俗】【画】【”】【无】【从】【谈】【起】【,】【“】【处】【处】【突】【出】【”】【则】【有】【过】【誉】【之】【嫌】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【▲】【本】【文】【语】【言】【有】【优】【点】【,】【但】【问】【题】【似】【更】【多】【些】【。】【讲】【优】【点】【,】【也】【需】【恰】【如】【其】【分】【才】【是】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【9】【】】【“】【艺】【术】【感】【染】【力】【”】【这】【样】【的】【词】【语】【一】【般】【不】【能】【用】【来】【评】【价】【学】【生】【作】【文】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【2】【0】【】】【现】【在】【能】【在】【“】【炼】【字】【炼】【句】【上】【下】【工】【夫】【”】【的】【学】【生】【恐】【怕】【是】【少】【而】【又】【少】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【当】【清】【晨】【拉】【开】【窗】【帘】【,】【房】【间】【立】【时】【被】【阳】【光】【照】【亮】【。】【窗】【前】【正】【怒】【放】【的】【玫】【瑰】【,】【散】【发】【出】【淡】【淡】【的】【芳】【香】【,】【夜】【里】【,】【它】【花】【瓣】【闭】【拢】【;】【清】【晨】【它】【就】【再】【度】【开】【放】【,】【它】【的】【生】【命】【好】【顽】【强】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【情】【景】【令】【我】【十】【分】【感】【动】【。】【其】【实】【还】【有】【比】【这】【更】【令】【人】【感】【动】【的】【呢】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【不】【知】【你】【是】【否】【听】【过】【这】【样】【一】【个】【凄】【美】【的】【故】【事】【:】【日】【本】【某】【户】【人】【家】【装】【修】【,】【拆】【木】【板】【墙】【时】【,】【发】【现】【一】【只】【壁】【虎】【被】【一】【根】【从】【外】【面】【钉】【进】【来】【的】【钉】【子】【钉】【住】【了】【尾】【巴】【。】【这】【居】【然】【是】【主】【人】【很】【长】【时】【间】【以】【前】【盖】【房】【子】【时】【钉】【上】【去】【的】【。】【见】【此】【状】【,】【主】【人】【暂】【时】【停】【止】【了】【装】【修】【,】【他】【要】【一】【探】【究】【竟】【。】【没】【多】【久】【,】【钻】【过】【来】【另】【一】【只】【壁】【虎】【,】【嘴】【里】【含】【着】【食】【物】【过】【来】【喂】【它】【…】【…】【主】【人】【一】【时】【愣】【住】【了】【,】【这】【是】【怎】【样】【的】【生】【命】【,】【怎】【样】【的】【爱】【呀】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【0】【8】【年】【5】【月】【1】【5】【日】【,】【在】【汶】【川】【灾】【区】【垮】【塌】【的】【房】【子】【下】【,】【一】【位】【死】【去】【的】【母】【亲】【双】【膝】【跪】【地】【,】【支】【撑】【身】【体】【护】【住】【了】【三】【个】【月】【大】【的】【婴】【儿】【,】【而】【她】【的】【孩】【子】【却】【毫】【发】【未】【损】【。】【救】【援】【者】【在】【孩】【子】【的】【被】【子】【里】【,】【发】【现】【了】【一】【部】【手】【机】【,】【只】【见】【屏】【幕】【短】【信】【上】【显】【示】【着】【1】【8】【个】【字】【:】【“】【亲】【爱】【的】【宝】【贝】【,】【如】【果】【你】【还】【活】【着】【,】【一】【定】【记】【住】【,】【我】【爱】【你】【。】【”】【“】【我】【爱】【你】【”】【,】【多】【么】【美】【丽】【的】【语】【言】【,】【面】【对】【着】【这】【无】【私】【的】【爱】【,】【我】【们】【怎】【能】【不】【奉】【献】【出】【自】【己】【的】【一】【切】【,】【甚】【至】【是】【生】【命】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【世】【界】【上】【有】【一】【种】【死】【,】【永】【远】【也】【不】【代】【表】【毁】【灭】【,】【那】【就】【是】【自】【落】【的】【花】【,】【归】【根】【的】【叶】【。】【生】【命】【虽】【然】【消】【逝】【了】【,】【但】【留】【给】【人】【间】【的】【一】【种】【精】【神】【,】【一】【种】【气】【质】【,】【一】【种】【洒】【脱】【却】【是】【永】【恒】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【世】【间】【万】【物】【唯】【有】【生】【命】【最】【为】【珍】【贵】【,】【但】【又】【是】【转】【瞬】【即】【逝】【的】【,】【它】【短】【暂】【得】【如】【同】【天】【穹】【中】【一】【颗】【稍】【纵】【即】【逝】【的】【流】【星】【,】【那】【么】【我】【们】【不】【是】【应】【该】【让】【生】【命】【绽】【放】【更】【多】【的】【光】【彩】【吗】【?】【陆】【放】【翁】【的】【“】【零】【落】【成】【泥】【碾】【作】【尘】【,】【只】【有】【香】【如】【故】【”】【,】【文】【天】【祥】【的】【“】【人】【生】【自】【古】【谁】【无】【死】【,】【留】【取】【丹】【心】【照】【汗】【青】【”】【,】【岳】【飞】【的】【“】【怒】【发】【冲】【冠】【”】【,】【司】【马】【迁】【的】【忍】【辱】【负】【重】【著】【史】【记】【…】【…】【都】【在】【向】【我】【们】【诉】【说】【着】【生】【命】【的】【真】【谛】【。】【那】【么】【,】【是】【什】【么】【力】【量】【让】【他】【们】【变】【得】【不】【平】【凡】【呢】【?】【是】【活】【着】【的】【信】【念】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【如】【果】【你】【不】【能】【做】【一】【棵】【大】【树】【,】【那】【么】【就】【做】【一】【棵】【小】【草】【,】【铺】【就】【路】【边】【的】【林】【荫】【;】【如】【果】【你】【不】【能】【做】【一】【条】【小】【河】【,】【那】【么】【就】【做】【一】【滴】【水】【,】【去】【滋】【润】【一】【寸】【土】【地】【;】【如】【果】【你】【不】【能】【做】【无】【垠】【的】【大】【海】【,】【那】【么】【就】【做】【一】【朵】【浪】【花】【,】【点】【缀】【大】【海】【的】【波】【澜】【。】【我】【们】【的】【生】【命】【虽】【平】【凡】【,】【但】【要】【让】【它】【活】【得】【有】【意】【义】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【是】【一】【篇】【以】【“】【信】【念】【、】【生】【命】【”】【为】【话】【题】【的】【习】【作】【,】【小】【作】【者】【诠】【释】【自】【己】【对】【生】【命】【的】【理】【解】【,】【感】【悟】【深】【刻】【、】【独】【到】【,】【蕴】【涵】【哲】【理】【。】【在】【结】【构】【上】【,】【作】【者】【先】【写】【植】【物】【、】【动】【物】【,】【而】【后】【再】【写】【对】【”】【人】【”】【生】【命】【的】【层】【层】【深】【入】【的】【理】【性】【认】【识】【。】【文】【中】【选】【取】【事】【件】【真】【实】【、】【典】【型】【、】【有】【说】【服】【力】【,】【震】【撼】【人】【心】【,】【引】【发】【读】【者】【去】【思】【考】【。】【比】【喻】【、】【排】【比】【、】【引】【用】【等】【修】【辞】【手】【法】【运】【用】【较】【成】【功】【,】【为】【文】【章】【增】【添】【文】【采】【。】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【李】【秀】【琴】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】韩德君【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【①】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【坐】【落】【在】【苏】【北】【古】【镇】【梁】【垛】【2】【0】【国】【道】【与】【她】【擦】【肩】【而】【过】【,】【②】【川】【流】【不】【息】【的】【车】【辆】【带】【来】【了】【众】【多】【的】【信】【息】【与】【商】【品】【,】【带】【来】【了】【家】【乡】【日】【新】【月】【异】【的】【变】【化】【。】【串】【场】【河】【像】【一】【条】【绿】【色】【的】【丝】【绸】【,】【缓】【缓】【地】【向】【北】【飘】【去】【,】【养】【育】【着】【这】【一】【方】【朴】【实】【勤】【劳】【的】【水】【乡】【儿】【女】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【③】【这】【里】【虽】【然】【没】【有】【名】【人】【故】【居】【美】【丽】【传】【说】【,】【也】【没】【有】【名】【胜】【古】【迹】【、】【高】【山】【大】【川】【。】【但】【她】【却】【是】【一】【朵】【刚】【绽】【开】【的】【花】【蕾】【,】【以】【其】【独】【特】【的】【④】【丰】【姿】【给】【人】【美】【的】【享】【受】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【啊】【,】【朋】【友】【,】【请】【到】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【来】【吧】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【⑤】【秋】【天】【,】【是】【家】【乡】【最】【热】【闹】【的】【季】【节】【。】【欢】【乐】【的】【田】【野】【上】【到】【处】【是】【翠】【玉】【镶】【金】【。】【那】【洁】【白】【的】【棉】【絮】【会】【把】【你】【团】【团】【围】【住】【,】【让】【你】【置】【身】【于】【白】【云】【中】【,】【一】【时】【竟】【不】【知】【高】【低】【,】【不】【辨】【东】【西】【。】【远】【处】【,】【一】【望】【无】【际】【的】【金】【黄】【色】【的】【稻】【子】【在】【微】【风】【中】【向】【你】【频】【频】【招】【手】【,】【急】【不】【可】【耐】【地】【叫】【着】【:】【“】【熟】【了】【!】【熟】【了】【!】【”】【⑥】【月】【光】【下】【热】【情】【好】【客】【的】【家】【乡】【人】【会】【拉】【着】【你】【的】【手】【谈】【天】【说】【地】【。】【那】【时】【候】【,】【他】【们】【会】【忘】【记】【一】【天】【的】【疲】【劳】【掰】【着】【手】【指】【头】【告】【诉】【你】【,】【谁】【家】【的】【小】【伙】【子】【出】【门】【半】【年】【就】【成】【了】【小】【老】【板】【,】【谁】【家】【的】【姑】【娘】【足】【不】【出】【户】【却】【是】【名】【闻】【遐】【迩】【的】【养】【蚕】【好】【手】【。】【他】【们】【仿】【佛】【有】【说】【不】【尽】【的】【新】【鲜】【事】【,】【⑦】【道】【不】【完】【的】【幸】【福】【水】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【⑧】【伴】【随】【着】【春】【天】【的】【脚】【步】【,】【展】【现】【你】【眼】【前】【的】【又】【是】【另】【一】【番】【景】【象】【。】【⑨】【黑】【土】【地】【立】【刻】【换】【上】【了】【一】【身】【绿】【装】【。】【金】【灿】【灿】【的】【油】【菜】【花】【⑩】【装】【满】【了】【你】【的】【眼】【睛】【,】【惹】【来】【了】【一】【大】【群】【的】【蜜】【蜂】【、】【蝴】【蝶】【。】【绿】【油】【油】【的】【麦】【子】【也】【俯】【首】【微】【笑】【仿】【佛】【预】【示】【着】【又】【是】【一】【个】【丰】【收】【年】【。】【【】【1】【1】【】】【人】【们】【的】【欢】【歌】【笑】【语】【、】【机】【器】【的】【轰】【鸣】【声】【奏】【起】【了】【最】【动】【听】【的】【“】【闹】【三】【春】【”】【交】【响】【乐】【!】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【你】【知】【道】【吗】【,】【到】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【来】【一】【起】【捕】【鱼】【,】【这】【可】【是】【一】【件】【乐】【事】【。】【串】【场】【河】【以】【及】【大】【大】【小】【小】【的】【鱼】【塘】【是】【【】【1】【2】【】】【取】【之】【不】【尽】【的】【渔】【场】【。】【不】【必】【说】【柳】【下】【垂】【钓】【趣】【,】【烟】【雨】【透】【蓑】【衣】【,】【也】【不】【必】【说】【白】【帆】【映】【碧】【水】【,】【渔】【歌】【唱】【晚】【霞】【,】【单】【是】【冬】【季】【破】【冰】【捕】【鱼】【就】【可】【以】【让】【你】【乐】【而】【忘】【返】【了】【。】【请】【看】【吧】【,】【【】【1】【3】【】】【一】【网】【收】【到】【净】【是】【鱼】【,】【大】【的】【四】【五】【斤】【,】【小】【的】【也】【有】【二】【三】【斤】【,】【有】【时】【还】【能】【网】【到】【几】【只】【冬】【季】【罕】【见】【的】【大】【螃】【蟹】【。】【于】【是】【晚】【上】【便】【有】【鲜】【鱼】【肥】【蟹】【下】【饭】【了】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【【】【1】【4】【】】【朋】【友】【,】【如】【果】【说】【祖】【国】【是】【一】【座】【大】【花】【园】【,】【那】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【就】【是】【一】【朵】【带】【露】【的】【玫】【瑰】【沐】【浴】【着】【党】【的】【雨】【露】【阳】【光】【,】【开】【得】【更】【加】【绚】【丽】【多】【彩】【。】【2】【0】【年】【,】【我】【们】【镇】【纳】【税】【超】【亿】【元】【,】【跻】【身】【于】【苏】【北】【小】【康】【示】【范】【镇】【的】【行】【列】【。】【如】【今】【家】【乡】【人】【又】【在】【奏】【起】【时】【代】【的】【最】【强】【音】【加】【强】【精】【神】【文】【明】【建】【设】【,】【争】【取】【早】【日】【跨】【入】【省】【文】【明】【镇】【的】【先】【进】【行】【列】【。】【祝】【愿】【家】【乡】【骑】【上】【时】【代】【的】【骏】【马】【奔】【驰】【吧】【!】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【朋】【友】【,】【请】【到】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【来】【吧】【!】【这】【里】【物】【阜】【民】【丰】【,】【景】【美】【,】【人】【更】【美】【。】【你】【来】【了】【,】【保】【证】【你】【看】【不】【够】【,】【观】【不】【尽】【,】【梦】【里】【再】【重】【游】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【1】【●】【点】【评】【:】【读】【罢】【这】【篇】【习】【作】【,】【感】【到】【有】【一】【种】【【】【1】【5】【】】【浓】【郁】【的】【乡】【土】【气】【息】【,】【清】【新】【而】【自】【然】【加】【之】【文】【题】【上】【一】【个】【“】【请】【”】【字】【,】【倍】【觉】【作】【者】【对】【家】【乡】【小】【镇】【的】【热】【爱】【之】【情】【。】【作】【者】【【】【1】【6】【】】【观】【察】【细】【致】【,】【反】【映】【家】【乡】【风】【貌】【,】【抓】【住】【了】【特】【色】【。】【既】【撷】【取】【了】【春】【、】【秋】【两】【季】【苏】【北】【水】【乡】【的】【不】【同】【的】【场】【景】【来】【写】【,】【又】【描】【写】【了】【冬】【季】【捕】【鱼】【这】【一】【令】【人】【乐】【而】【忘】【返】【的】【【】【1】【7】【】】【场】【面】【;】【既】【是】【一】【幅】【风】【景】【画】【、】【【】【1】【8】【】】【风】【俗】【画】【,】【又】【处】【处】【突】【出】【了】【家】【乡】【人】【的】【力】【量】【和】【精】【神】【,】【提】【升】【了】【文】【章】【的】【内】【涵】【▲】【另】【外】【,】【语】【言】【也】【形】【象】【生】【动】【,】【富】【有】【诗】【意】【一】【是】【综】【合】【运】【用】【了】【拟】【人】【、】【比】【喻】【等】【多】【种】【修】【辞】【手】【法】【,】【增】【添】【了】【文】【章】【的】【美】【感】【;】【二】【是】【善】【翻】【古】【人】【意】【,】【如】【“】【柳】【下】【垂】【钓】【趣】【,】【烟】【雨】【透】【蓑】【衣】【”】【“】【白】【帆】【映】【碧】【水】【,】【渔】【歌】【唱】【晚】【霞】【”】【读】【来】【更】【具】【【】【1】【9】【】】【艺】【术】【感】【染】【力】【;】【三】【是】【长】【句】【与】【短】【句】【、】【整】【句】【与】【散】【句】【的】【结】【合】【,】【使】【行】【文】【活】【泼】【、】【自】【由】【。】【这】【些】【都】【足】【见】【小】【作】【者】【【】【2】【0】【】】【在】【炼】【字】【炼】【句】【上】【下】【了】【工】【夫】【。】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【1】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【①】【“】【坐】【落】【”】【一】【词】【是】【多】【余】【的】【。】【第】【一】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【苏】【北】【古】【镇】【梁】【垛】【是】【我】【的】【家】【乡】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【“】【信】【息】【”】【用】【“】【众】【多】【”】【来】【形】【容】【欠】【妥】【。】【“】【商】【品】【”】【既】【有】【带】【来】【的】【,】【也】【有】【运】【出】【的】【。】【画】【线】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【便】【捷】【的】【交】【通】【促】【进】【了】【经】【济】【的】【繁】【荣】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【此】【处】【可】【改】【为】【:】【这】【里】【虽】【然】【没】【有】【名】【胜】【古】【迹】【、】【美】【丽】【传】【说】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【④】【“】【丰】【姿】【”】【改】【为】【“】【风】【姿】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑤】【画】【线】【句】【对】【全】【段】【有】【引】【领】【的】【作】【用】【,】【但】【“】【热】【闹】【”】【似】【不】【如】【“】【繁】【忙】【”】【来】【得】【贴】【切】【。】【“】【翠】【玉】【镶】【金】【”】【用】【得】【也】【欠】【妥】【,】【因】【为】【棉】【田】【和】【稻】【田】【之】【间】【不】【存】【在】【“】【镶】【”】【和】【被】【“】【镶】【”】【的】【问】【题】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑥】【为】【什】【么】【一】【定】【要】【在】【月】【光】【下】【呢】【?】【完】【全】【可】【以】【没】【有】【这】【个】【时】【间】【限】【制】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑦】【画】【线】【句】【不】【通】【,】【只】【要】【把】【“】【水】【”】【改】【成】【“】【感】【”】【即】【可】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑧】【此】【句】【最】【好】【改】【为】【:】【春】【天】【,】【是】【家】【乡】【最】【美】【丽】【的】【季】【节】【。】【这】【样】【就】【可】【与】【前】【一】【段】【相】【呼】【应】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑨】【苏】【北】【的】【土】【地】【并】【非】【是】【黑】【色】【的】【,】【不】【要】【硬】【搬】【现】【成】【的】【词】【语】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【⑩】【用】【词】【生】【硬】【,】【—】【—】【你】【的】【眼】【睛】【能】【“】【装】【”】【得】【下】【吗】【?】【画】【线】【句】【删】【去】【反】【而】【和】【下】【文】【接】【得】【更】【紧】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【1】【】】【画】【线】【句】【为】【套】【话】【。】【记】【住】【,】【这】【是】【广】【阔】【的】【田】【野】【,】【如】【果】【是】【在】【建】【筑】【工】【地】【或】【工】【厂】【的】【厂】【房】【里】【,】【则】【还】【有】【可】【能】【。】【删】【掉】【也】【不】【影】【响】【文】【中】【的】【表】【达】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【2】【】】【天】【下】【并】【没】【有】【“】【取】【之】【不】【尽】【的】【渔】【场】【”】【,】【赞】【美】【家】【乡】【,】【也】【不】【可】【有】【夸】【大】【之】【词】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【3】【】】【画】【线】【句】【可】【改】【为】【:】【网】【网】【打】【起】【的】【都】【是】【活】【蹦】【乱】【跳】【的】【肥】【鱼】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【4】【】】【这】【一】【段】【的】【首】【句】【是】【套】【话】【,】【改】【为】【:】【家】【乡】【的】【经】【济】【发】【展】【更】【是】【迅】【速】【。】【这】【样】【和】【下】【文】【联】【系】【就】【紧】【密】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【5】【】】【“】【点】【评】【”】【写】【得】【尚】【可】【,】【但】【仍】【有】【可】【商】【榷】【之】【处】【。】【“】【浓】【郁】【”】【二】【字】【还】【谈】【不】【上】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【6】【】】【从】【文】【中】【看】【不】【出】【作】【者】【有】【细】【致】【的】【观】【察】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【7】【】】【本】【文】【并】【无】【场】【面】【描】【写】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【8】【】】【“】【风】【俗】【画】【”】【无】【从】【谈】【起】【,】【“】【处】【处】【突】【出】【”】【则】【有】【过】【誉】【之】【嫌】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【▲】【本】【文】【语】【言】【有】【优】【点】【,】【但】【问】【题】【似】【更】【多】【些】【。】【讲】【优】【点】【,】【也】【需】【恰】【如】【其】【分】【才】【是】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【1】【9】【】】【“】【艺】【术】【感】【染】【力】【”】【这】【样】【的】【词】【语】【一】【般】【不】【能】【用】【来】【评】【价】【学】【生】【作】【文】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【2】【0】【】】【现】【在】【能】【在】【“】【炼】【字】【炼】【句】【上】【下】【工】【夫】【”】【的】【学】【生】【恐】【怕】【是】【少】【而】【又】【少】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】

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【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【初】【次】【来】【到】【这】【座】【陌】【生】【的】【城】【市】【,】【不】【知】【道】【自】【己】【该】【何】【去】【何】【从】【。】【我】【背】【着】【沉】【重】【的】【行】【李】【,】【千】【辛】【万】【苦】【才】【办】【完】【一】【切】【入】【学】【手】【续】【,】【开】【始】【了】【新】【的】【求】【学】【之】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【很】【少】【跟】【同】【学】【交】【流】【,】【相】【遇】【时】【总】【是】【低】【头】【走】【过】【,】【只】【一】【心】【沉】【浸】【在】【自】【己】【的】【世】【界】【中】【。】【在】【心】【中】【筑】【起】【一】【道】【高】【高】【的】【自】【卫】【的】【墙】【,】【四】【周】【一】【片】【漆】【黑】【,】【性】【情】【孤】【僻】【的】【我】【就】【这】【样】【被】【遗】【忘】【在】【了】【黑】【暗】【的】【角】【落】【。】【同】【学】【们】【的】【笑】【声】【传】【入】【耳】【帘】【,】【对】【我】【是】【一】【个】【讽】【刺】【,】【刺】【痛】【了】【我】【的】【耳】【膜】【。】【我】【拼】【命】【地】【学】【习】【,】【以】【看】【书】【来】【消】【磨】【时】【光】【。】【渐】【渐】【地】【,】【这】【个】【世】【界】【彻】【底】【与】【我】【隔】【绝】【,】【即】【使】【置】【身】【于】【喧】【嚣】【的】【人】【群】【,】【内】【心】【仍】【感】【孤】【寂】【;】【明】【明】【周】【围】【是】【熟】【悉】【的】【面】【孔】【,】【却】【总】【觉】【得】【陌】【生】【无】【比】【。】【这】【一】【切】【,】【在】【别】【人】【的】【眼】【中】【,】【只】【说】【明】【了】【我】【是】【一】【个】【孤】【傲】【的】【人】【。】【唯】【一】【带】【给】【我】【欣】【慰】【的】【是】【期】【末】【考】【试】【,】【我】【竟】【然】【考】【了】【全】【班】【第】【一】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 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】【 】【那】【晚】【躺】【在】【床】【上】【,】【脑】【海】【里】【不】【断】【浮】【现】【着】【和】【老】【师】【谈】【话】【的】【情】【景】【,】【怀】【着】【小】【小】【的】【希】【冀】【,】【我】【很】【快】【便】【进】【入】【了】【梦】【乡】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【假】【期】【后】【,】【我】【回】【到】【学】【校】【,】【什】【么】【也】【没】【变】【,】【唯】【一】【不】【同】【的】【是】【我】【的】【脸】【上】【多】【了】【一】【抹】【微】【笑】【,】【走】【进】【宿】【舍】【我】【开】【始】【学】【会】【向】【别】【人】【问】【好】【;】【课】【间】【我】【开】【始】【学】【会】【与】【别】【人】【一】【起】【嬉】【戏】【;】【课】【堂】【上】【我】【开】【始】【学】【会】【与】【别】【人】【讨】【论】【学】【习】【。】【没】【想】【到】【,】【我】【的】【世】【界】【竟】【发】【生】【了】【翻】【天】【覆】【地】【的】【变】【化】【,】【我】【找】【回】【了】【曾】【经】【迷】【失】【的】【自】【我】【,】【找】【回】【了】【自】【信】【,】【也】【赢】【得】【了】【友】【谊】【,】【赢】【得】【了】【信】【任】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【事】【实】【雄】【辩】【地】【告】【诉】【我】【:】【在】【很】【多】【时】【候】【我】【们】【需】【要】【点】【亮】【心】【灯】【,】【用】【心】【指】【引】【着】【我】【们】【前】【进】【,】【听】【听】【心】【的】【呼】【唤】【,】【我】【们】【会】【活】【得】【更】【精】【彩】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【杨】【盛】【红】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】韩德君【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【从】【我】【懂】【事】【起】【,】【我】【就】【记】【得】【每】【次】【都】【是】【父】【母】【陪】【伴】【我】【走】【那】【一】【段】【一】【段】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【上】【幼】【儿】【园】【的】【那】【天】【,】【是】【一】【个】【大】【雨】【天】【,】【父】【亲】【骑】【着】【摩】【托】【,】【载】【着】【我】【和】【母】【亲】【,】【母】【亲】【一】【手】【抱】【着】【我】【,】【一】【手】【打】【着】【雨】【伞】【,】【父】【母】【全】【身】【湿】【透】【,】【而】【我】【却】【滴】【雨】【未】【淋】【,】【是】【父】【母】【的】【双】【翼】【庇】【护】【着】【我】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【上】【小】【学】【的】【那】【天】【,】【是】【个】【艳】【阳】【高】【照】【的】【日】【子】【,】【九】【月】【的】【热】【浪】【未】【去】【,】【父】【亲】【外】【出】【了】【,】【母】【亲】【打】【着】【一】【把】【大】【伞】【送】【我】【上】【学】【。】【校】【园】【里】【,】【母】【亲】【跑】【来】【跑】【去】【地】【办】【理】【各】【种】【入】【学】【手】【续】【,】【而】【我】【则】【坐】【在】【大】【树】【底】【下】【,】【喝】【着】【母】【亲】【买】【的】【冷】【饮】【,】【看】【着】【来】【来】【往】【往】【的】【人】【群】【,】【还】【不】【时】【地】【埋】【怨】【母】【亲】【太】【慢】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【天】【有】【不】【测】【风】【云】【,】【家】【庭】【的】【变】【故】【,】【突】【然】【一】【下】【把】【我】【抛】【进】【了】【深】【渊】【。】【离】【异】【后】【独】【撑】【家】【庭】【的】【母】【亲】【,】【突】【然】【又】【摔】【伤】【了】【脚】【,】【虽】【然】【父】【亲】【从】【他】【的】【新】【家】【里】【寄】【来】【了】【一】【点】【钱】【给】【母】【亲】【治】【脚】【,】【但】【毕】【竟】【是】【杯】【水】【车】【薪】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【母】【亲】【的】【坚】【持】【下】【,】【我】【没】【有】【辍】【学】【。】【为】【了】【母】【亲】【的】【心】【愿】【,】【我】【不】【能】【辍】【学】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【语】【文】【:】【5】【7】【分】【;】【数】【学】【:】【2】【3】【分】【…】【…】【”】【当】【班】【主】【任】【公】【布】【期】【中】【考】【试】【成】【绩】【时】【,】【用】【她】【那】【最】【严】【厉】【的】【眼】【神】【看】【着】【我】【时】【,】【我】【深】【深】【地】【把】【头】【低】【下】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【乌】【云】【布】【满】【天】【空】【,】【刹】【那】【间】【,】【电】【闪】【雷】【鸣】【,】【白】【天】【几】【乎】【变】【成】【了】【黑】【夜】【,】【大】【雨】【倾】【盆】【而】【下】【,】【铺】【天】【盖】【地】【,】【混】【沌】【世】【间】【…】【…】【就】【在】【我】【几】【近】【绝】【望】【的】【时】【刻】【,】【天】【空】【又】【突】【然】【放】【晴】【了】【。】【大】【雨】【过】【后】【,】【天】【高】【云】【淡】【,】【晴】【空】【万】【里】【,】【空】【气】【清】【新】【而】【诱】【人】【。】【我】【知】【道】【,】【我】【得】【一】【个】【人】【上】【路】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【把】【母】【亲】【的】【轮】【椅】【推】【出】【来】【,】【扶】【母】【亲】【坐】【上】【,】【安】【顿】【好】【一】【切】【之】【后】【,】【以】【最】【快】【的】【速】【度】【赶】【往】【学】【校】【。】【中】【午】【放】【学】【后】【,】【又】【以】【最】【快】【的】【速】【度】【赶】【回】【家】【为】【母】【亲】【做】【饭】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【班】【主】【任】【的】【眼】【神】【,】【早】【已】【没】【有】【了】【严】【厉】【,】【变】【得】【无】【比】【温】【柔】【了】【,】【当】【然】【,】【不】【只】【是】【因】【为】【我】【的】【语】【文】【成】【绩】【翻】【番】【,】【数】【学】【成】【绩】【加】【百】【。】【老】【师】【以】【知】【识】【与】【爱】【意】【的】【食】【粮】【相】【赠】【,】【帮】【助】【我】【走】【出】【人】【生】【风】【雨】【凄】【迷】【路】【,】【我】【不】【止】【一】【次】【地】【默】【念】【着】【老】【师】【的】【恩】【情】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 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